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Films can tell us a lot about the country in which they were made. What have you learned about a country from watching its movies? Use specific examples and details to support your response.

In my opinion movies can tell us a lot about the country which they made. I think this way because you can see a lot of cultural features in a movie about the country which they shoot the movie.

For example in french movies, you can easily see Eiffel tower view on the backround of a lot of scenes. Its a unique building from france and you can always understand that they are in paris when you see the scene without any further knowlege. Another thing that you can see in a movie which were made at france is; they use romance in such a different way then any other country. One more unique thing about france is the french cuisine and you can always see few features from it too.

And if you watch a movie which were made in India, you’ll always see all the actors dancing together at the and of the movie. This activity is also unique and you can’t find it on any movie else. Another thing about the Indian movies, you’ll see most of the people dressed as an Indian which is also unique. Also you can never see someone eating a beef or steak in an Indian movie because cows are sacred in their religion.

Due to these reasons i think you can learn a lot of things from a movie about the country which they were made. Maybe you’ll not understand how much you learn from a movie about the country right away but i’m sure that if you saw a lot of movies from the same country; you’ll see that you are already familiar with a lot of things before you go there. And i think this fact supports my decision in many ways.

Please Read the advice I have given in my previous essays before writing an essay yourself. I will not mark essays that do not follow the structures I have given, sorry.

aslanerh Nickli Üyeden Alıntı

yukarda türkçe sorup sonra ingilizce sormuşlar o yüzden ingilizce yazdım.

toefl writing formatı hakkında hiçbir bilgi bulamıyorum, örneğin paragraflar arası boşluk olacak mı, her paragraf en az kaç cümle olmalı, bu cümleler neleri belirtmeli, bir main idea savunurken negatif görüşler ve savunduğumuz fikrin zayıflıkları da belirtilebilir mi vs vs

Good questions; however, if you spend some time going through the feedback, you will see that most of them have been answered in terms of format and structure (especially when giving supporting ideas. I am under the opinion that you are approaching the independent writing section in totally the wrong way. You need to remember that TOEFL is NOT an academic exam; it is an English level test set in an academic environment. The aim of the independent writing section is to test your use of ordinary everyday English in terms of both grammar and vocabulary and how you relate all this to a simple question.

wriing puanı format yüzünden çok etkileniyor mu

ertugrulevliyaoglu Nickli Üyeden Alıntı

yok ondan degil burdaki cogu kimse zaten toefl a calısyor aynen bu senın yazdıgnı yazarlar ondan suphen olmasın ne soru soracaksan TURKCE sor .

Some people prefer to spend their free time outdoors.Other people prefer to spend their leisure time indoors.Would you prefer to be outside or would you prefer to be inside for your leisure activities?Use specific reasons and examples to explain your choice.


People have different likes.Because all of people are different.And they have different character.Some people friendly some people strict or unsocial anyway.Therefore some people like go out to spend their free time and some people prefer to spend their time in their house.I personally choose first choice.I like go out with my friends also not oly with my friends i enjoy myself too.

I think both of alternatives have different specialty.If you go out you have a lot of choice.For instance you can go cinema go to seaside and walk around also you can do shopping and you can do a lot of different activity.Maybe drive a car “bile” activity too.People are social living being.We need to talk with others.We need to have friends.You can go to cafe or restaurant with your friends or on a wonderful Sunday you besides go street to play basketball or football.For instance some people like to watch football match in their house some people like in stadium the whole issue is it.

Therefore you can call your friends and invite them to your house and you can do activities in your house.Your house is clean not crowded not cold or hot not noisy.If you want to listen yourself you have to do it in your house.In big cities there are not places like it.Besides maybe you want to stand alone with your girlfriend you have to stand on your house.

Consequently i dont distinguish where i am.For me it is important that what i want to do and with who.The both alternatives have specialities.For instance you can not play chess in outside or you can not play basketball in your house.

Before I mark this essay I want you to go back and read all the advice I have given others and rewrite your essay. Think of this forum as a classroom and all the essays above as lessons to improve your own essay writing. As it stands this essay is worth 2 points

COULD YOU PLEASE SCORE MY WRITING AND SAY THE MISTAKES

Some people believe that the Earth is being harmed (damaged) by human activity. Others feel that human activity makes the Earth a better place to live. What is your opinion? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

The majority of people believe that, the improvements and investigations that are done by humans , make the Earth a better place to live.In deciding, as to wheather or not, Earth is being harmed by human activities,there do exist variant perspectives,some of which,I agree with.This situation based on some notions, such as, people make enviroment dirty and they finish the natural resources.
To begin with, people make the enviroment dirty increadebly. To highlight this point, lets say, lots of factories were constructed,as a result of this, there are a great deal of garbage of these factories. The owner of the factories should provide solution about these garbages but they generally choose the easy way and drop all the garbage to the sea so plenty of sea spicies might die. Also goverments should avoid this situation but most of them deal with only taxes. Especially in winters, people need to warm up and to overcome warming they cut trees. Moreover, people cause air pollution by fires.
In addition to previous point, nowadays the population of the Earth increased rapidly besides they do not care about the natural balance of the Earth. As a result of this, they need more sources and they damage more the natural life. As an illustrution, according to evidence the amount of the drink water in the World may finish in a few centuries. People should not waste water. In addition, people start to hunt more wild animals and this may cause extinction of some spicies.
In conclusion, the arguments proved that, people make Earth dirtier and waste the resources so the Earth is being harmed by human activities. From my perspective people should be careful about the Earth, due to the fact that, their children will may live in a dirty and unsatisfied place.

MY ANOTHER WRITING

It has recently been announced that a new movie theater may be built in your neighborhood. Do you support or oppose this plan? Why? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.

Movies take a significant place in intelligent being’s lives,due to the fact that,people have a good time while they are watching movie.If the place you are living has a movie theater , ofcourse it would be fine for the neighbors.In deciding,as to whether or not,building a new movie theater in my neighbourhood is well,there do exist variant perspectives,some of which,I agree with. From my perspective, the movie theater helps habitants to be social , increases the value of the region and improves the region’s economy.
To begin with,I opine that, going to a movie theater is a beneficial social activity .It is a well-known fact that, if you have a movie theater in your neighbourhood,you tend to go movie theater frequently.To highlight this point,lets say,when I was in university,my dormitory was out of the city and there were no transportation to center of the city at nights hence, we could not go anywhere at nights.After a while,a new movie theater was built near my neighbourhood,as a result of this,we were very glad because we could go to cinema together whenever we were bored.This cinema helped us to be more social instead of staying in dormitory at nights.
In addition to previous point,when a movie theater built,the region should be more valuable mainly because, scores of people want to go cinema and also tend to buy some other things such as food therefore it helps to improve the economy of the environment.
As an illustration,the newly constructed movie theater near my dormitory triggered the plenty of new shops to build so the value and the economy of the region improved immidiately.
In conclusion,the arguments shows that,a new constructed movie theater lead habitants to be social and also improves the value and economy of the enviroment. As a result of these facts,I strongly support to build new movie theater in my neighbourhood.

Arkadaşlar,

Essay imi değerlendirebilir misiniz ? özellikle essay organizasyonumu değerlendirmenizi ve tavsiyelerinizi merakla bekliyorum

Teşekkürler.

Subject :Attending a live performance(for example, a play, a concert, or sporting event) is more enjoyable than watching the same event on TV. Do you agree or disagree with the statment? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.



Feeling the time is better than watching! This was the motto of a sports company to make their products sold more. This may be the choice of lots of people to enjoy from an activity. However, to make a comparison amongst watching and attending, it is much reasonable to watch an organization to attending in today’s world in terms of adjusting atmosphere according to yourself, spending less time and less money.
Firstly, spending valuable time is more important than having fun for a short time in modern people life. You may fix atmosphere as you wish while watching an organization on TV. For example, for a concert, you may call your friends and order a pizza while watching on TV. In an outside activity, unexpected situations may steal your time. Nevertheless, joining a program will be affected by the strangers being there who has not got the same purpose with you. To avoid disturbance and behaving as you want watching on TV will be better choice.
Secondly, watching an organization makes you save time in your daily program. In modern world, time has more meaning in people’s life. By watching, you spend your time just for organization planned in your mind. You will not spend your time for extra effort like buying ticket, parking and trying to find your seat. Also, you will have a chance to do your hoseworks until the program starts on TV. Moreover, you will make energy save by watching the organization on TV. Because, no doubt that, much time means much energy. So, you will have energy kept for the next day.
Thirdly, another fact is that by watching you will not spend extra money for the things that you did. Thus, you may use your own fridge to drink and eat. You will not have any parking fare. For limited wages invisible expenses has become more crucial in daily life.
Consequently, watching an activity is much reasonable in our modern life. In today’s world people do not want to spend their time outside in vain, to save money and do activities to strengthen their relations.

Hi
I am a student from Çukurova University and I have an exam on wednesday 8th september. I have to prepare for it, so I decided to share my essays in this forum
If you read it and give feedback I appretiate it
thanks in advance

Topic:Do you believe that mothers should work?

Over the last 50 years or so, women are forced to work because of the financial problems their families faced. Most of the people support that women should work because of that problem.
And they also think that women should work because they should not be idle. Working is inevitable in today's world, but when it comes to women I definetely debate the idea that women should
work for several reasons.
The first reason as to why women should not work is that of family maters. When a woman works, she cannot spend her time neither for her children nor chores because of her job. For instance,
my friend's mother use to work when my friend was in secondary school. He had problems with his lessons in the school and his mother could not do much thing to chance it, because she has hardly
any time for him.
The second reason as to why women should not work is that of troubles she might encounter while working. Women are so delicate that, long work hours make them tired. Also, economic responsibility
is father's duty, not mother's. If a woman want not to be idle, instead of working, they can spend their time for various activities like sports, hobbies and arts maybe.
The last reason as to why women should not work is that of her role in the family. A woman is given a sacred duty "motherhood", and being a mother is not that easy. I believe that every man's dream
is to see a big smile from his lovely wife when he come home from a stressful work.


woman is given a sacred duty "motherhood", and being a mother is not that easy. I believe that every man's dream
is to see a big smile from his lovely wife when he come home from a stressful work.

(this essay is written in 30minutes.I didn't wrote conclusion part because it is not important in my exam)

I will feel grateful if you check my essay too , thanks

do you agree or disagree with following idea;

teachers should give challenging tasks to students.

explain why or why not you hold that opinion with details and explanations.



Some might argue that we should not be hard on students which might scare them away from the schools, but I disagree with this idea. I believe we should assign difficult tasks for children at school for three reasons. First, in this way, they can learn hardship of life awaiting them after school. Second, it would be easy for them to deal with less difficult problems thanks to hard tasks and third, they can not have many adaptation problems in upper classes.

Firstly, they can learn the difficulty of life in early age. For example, our modern world is more competitive than ever before. To survive in this jungle, every student should be equipped with best possible weapons. They should study hard to get ready for the challenges awaiting them. There is a saying like "no pain, no gain". I guess it is very true especially for our world. Such as, a child should have a complete grasp of math to be successful in the business world. Giving simple math problems to his child at school won't help this child to develop the skills she needs to be successful in her life. On contrary, giving harsh tasks will help prepare them for real world.

Secondly, Simpler or more moderate problems look easier after hard tasks. For example, If students get used to have very hard assignments, she or he have more confidence to solve an assignment with normal difficulty. This helps this student to handle simple problems faster. For example, if this person has to do a calculation during her shopping to figure out how much money she has left after shopping. She can do this faster and easily thanks to her high math skills. In sum, she can use her knowledge more easily after becoming master in that particular subject.

Third, Students can be fully set for upper class lessons. For example, after this person passes to upper class, she or he won't have any problem with math or science because this student already knows quite well that particular subject from his previous classes. Because of the hard assignment, she can easily adapt to difficult curriculum of higher level class.

After all is said and done, I guess having hard tasks helps students in many ways. including learning the hardship of life, having high skills to deal with simple problems and being ready for upper class. That is why, I guess we should all be favor of these challenging tasks in their education. After all, they will get much out of them and they will not have much problems when they start their career.

Hi again, its my second essay, can you pls feedback

topic:Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Face-to-face communication is better than other types of communication, such as letters, email, or telephone calls.

People found different ways to communicate each other throughout history, by smoke, by pigeon, by letter, by telegraph, by telephone.Now they have more technology such
as internet, and thus they get the chance to communicate their all relatives and friends living far from them.People may think that they have a lot of inventions and should feel
lucky but people lost and important thing "face-to-face communication"

Face-to-face communication is better because other types of communications are not reliable.With the ways other than face-to-face communication, you cannot see with
whom you are talking, and you cannot be sure he/she is the person you think.For example, a friend of mine met a girl from a website on the Internet.They have talked with each
other for 3 months.Due to the fact that he trusted her, he told his secrets to her even the dirtiest ones.After 3 months it was revealed that she was not a girl but a boy from my
friend's class in school.

Face-to-face communication is better because other types of communications like the Internet, do not offer a real communication.When you talk someone face-to-face, you
enjoy the conversation.Because you can see him/her, you can use gestures and face expressions, you can use your tone of voice etc.But if you choose other ways, you cannot
even feel him/her.Even when you want to smile, you are confined to only ":)"

All in all due to the telephone, the Internet etc. people do not need to visit their relatives and friends.The communication devices are supposed to connect people, but in fact
they cut the connection between them.

Merhabalar benim toefl ibtden en az 74 almam lazım ıkı kere giridim sınava en iyi bölümüm speakingdir. writingde sonra gelir ve tam 9 gun sonra sınavım var . öncelikle benim püf noktaları yakalamam lazım buraya essay lerimizi gönderebiliyormuşuz peki direk yorum yapar gibi mi yollamamız lazım acaba ?

Bu da benim ilk essayim boyle yazıp yolladım ama umarım hata etmemişimdir sormuştum ama cevap veren olmamıştı.
kontrol edilirse benim için iyi olur


106. Students at universities often have a choice of places to live. They may choose to live
in university dormitories, or they may choose to live in apartments in the community.
Compare the advantages of living in university housing with the advantages of living in an
apartment in the community. Where would you prefer to live? Give reasons for your
preference.


Students can choose their place which is students live all the university life. Some people prefer dormitory , some of them choose apartment . All of these choices have advantages and disadvantages . However , I prefer dormitory of the my university for three reasons . First reason is position ,second is cheap and third is that dormitories have placeses to study.

First reason why ı prefer the dormitory is about position . İf I prefer an aparment , I may late for my lessons. For example , I live in an aparment and my aparment is in the Newyork Center but my university is in the New Paltz . To arrive my lessons , I must wake up two hours early . So I cannot sleep very well and I cannot succes on my lessons . However , I prefer the dormitory which is in the my campus. I have not problem like this. I can sleep very well ,because I should not wake up early . For this reason I prefer the dormitory.

Second reason why I prefer the dormitory is about cheap living. İf I prefer an aparment , I must pay a lot of money . For instance , one aparment’s rent is about 1500 $ in today and ı must pay the aparment’s electiricitys , water , internet and maybe parking system. İn totaly I must pay 2000 $ per mounts. And I must pay for the aparment’s shopping. However, dormitory’s cost is 1000 $ per mounts and ı have an internet , hot water , room which is only belong me. So as you see , living in dormitory is cheaper than an aparment. For this reason ı prefer the dormitory.

Last but not least advantage of the living in dormitory is that dormitories have placeses to study. İf I live in an aparment ı cannot study on my lessons very well because some days my friends come to my house and we hangout together. Or some days my girl friend come to my house and we watch some films. İf I lucy may ı study on my lessons one day per weeks. İt is not enough . However , the dormitories have placeses to study , I can use these palace for studing. Or dormitories have a library , I can go to library and ı can study on my lessons for hours. For his reason I prefer the dormitory.

To sum up , living in an aparment and dormitory have a lot of advantages and disadvantages. However , I think dormitories have more advantages than aparments. Dormitories good located , cheaper and have placeses to study or library. For all this reasons I prefer the dormitory.


Şimdiden teşekkür ederim.

Kasım ayında bende Toef sınavına girmeyi planlıyorum ama çokda bir umudum yok doğrusu. Her ne ise bende bir iki writing denemesi yapmak istiyorum. Üstteki arkaşın konusundan devam edeyim. Okuyup yorum yaparsanız sevinirim.


Many students go to different states and countries to continue their education as a university student. Finding a new place to stay is a mandatory. Apartments and dormitories are mojor choices to live and both of them have different advantages and disadvanteges. I experienced both of the these places and I think staying in an apartment is far better than staying in a dormitory so I prefer an apartment if I have to choise one of them.

Dormitory might be a great place to live if you're a freshman and new in the city. Sharing a room with strangers is an important experience in human life and It teaches understanding to other people and respect them. Living in a campus can give important opportunities to become social and education manner. For instance, you can join in lots of activities and getting more friends. Campus also can serve many services to you like sport saloons, swimming pools, libraies, free internet etc.

But in the other side, dormitories has many disadvantages too. Staying in a private room is usually more expensive than sharing apartment rents. Crowded rooms doesn't allow to privacy. Clearance, noise and irresponsible room mates may convert your life to hell. You cannot invite your friends or you cannot slept with your girlfriend. Getting alcohol and giving parties is forbidden. You have to turn the lights off when a room mate decides to sleep.

Staying in an apartment is another choice. Rentals maybe seem expensive and extra fees might be scare you but It's possible to share all these costs with a room mate and still you can have your own private room. It's not to possible compare apartments and dormitories in freedom window. You can cook your meal, invite your friends or slept with your girlfriend. Getting alcohol and giving parties are not problems if your room mate doesn't mind. Transportitation to campus might be the biggest problem but you can solve that with an apartment near the campus or bus station. Buying a car also might be great deal if you can afford it.

In a conclusion, I think benefits of an apartment is more attractive than dormitory. Free services might be good but It's negligible when having own room. So I prefer apartment living.

apolloturk Nickli Üyeden Alıntı

Kasım ayında bende Toef sınavına girmeyi planlıyorum ama çokda bir umudum yok doğrusu. Her ne ise bende bir iki writing denemesi yapmak istiyorum. Üstteki arkaşın konusundan devam edeyim. Okuyup yorum yaparsanız sevinirim.


Many students go to different states and countries to continue their education as a university student. Finding a new place to stay is a mandatory. Apartments and dormitories are mojor choices to live and both of them have different advantages and disadvanteges. I experienced both of the these places and I think staying in an apartment is far better than staying in a dormitory so I prefer an apartment if I have to choise one of them.

Dormitory might be a great place to live if you're a freshman and new in the city. Sharing a room with strangers is an important experience in human life and It teaches understanding to other people and respect them. Living in a campus can give important opportunities to become social and education manner. For instance, you can join in lots of activities and getting more friends. Campus also can serve many services to you like sport saloons, swimming pools, libraies, free internet etc.

But in the other side, dormitories has many disadvantages too. Staying in a private room is usually more expensive than sharing apartment rents. Crowded rooms doesn't allow to privacy. Clearance, noise and irresponsible room mates may convert your life to hell. You cannot invite your friends or you cannot slept with your girlfriend. Getting alcohol and giving parties is forbidden. You have to turn the lights off when a room mate decides to sleep.

Staying in an apartment is another choice. Rentals maybe seem expensive and extra fees might be scare you but It's possible to share all these costs with a room mate and still you can have your own private room. It's not to possible compare apartments and dormitories in freedom window. You can cook your meal, invite your friends or slept with your girlfriend. Getting alcohol and giving parties are not problems if your room mate doesn't mind. Transportitation to campus might be the biggest problem but you can solve that with an apartment near the campus or bus station. Buying a car also might be great deal if you can afford it.

In a conclusion, I think benefits of an apartment is more attractive than dormitory. Free services might be good but It's negligible when having own room. So I prefer apartment living.

Merhaba, ben sadece toefl ve ielts dersleri veren bir ingilizce ogretmeniyim. tum referanslarima ve hakkimdaki bilgilere Cenk Tuncay zel ngilizce Dersleri dan ulasabilirsiniz. Essay ini degerlendirecek olursak; bir kere bu essay senden compare and contrast tarzinda bir organizasyon bekliyor. ilk paragrafinda tercihini belirtmen guzel ancak sonraki paragraflarda yeterli transition lari kullanmamissin. ayrica sonuc paragrafin cok kisa olmus. yinede 17-18 puan alabilir. toefl writing de puan kazandiran temeller soyle:

1. organizasyon (5 tip essay dan dogru olan tarzda yazma isi)
2. grammar variety yani farkli yapilari kusursuz kullanabilmek
3. transitions, conjuctions kullanimi
4. vocab variety
5. imla kurallari