Thank you for all.

And my second essay.

Do you prefer to eat out or eat at home?

Food preference is so important and mustn't be neglected for a healthy and good life. In the past we used
to eat the meals cooked by our mothers. However, in today's world, there are so many sections to eat
something and the main preferences are eating at home or eating out. Different people can give different
responses from their habits but when it comes to me, I prefer to eat at home rather than to eat out for
following reasons.

First of all, I find the meals prepared in my home more delicious and tasteful. Although a lot of chemical
is used in meal prepared out, in order to make it's taste better, they cannot satisfy that I think. If you
want to cook a tasteful meal, it have to be natural as the first condition. In addition to this, foods
such as fastfood contains a lot of fat and spice and we cannot choose it according to our pleasure.

Secondly, despite the fact that somebody claims that eating outside is better for saving time as if the
main neccesity of a good life is more time, in my opinion health is more important than saving time. Thus,
we have to look for healthier one. I find the meal of my mother healthier of course. She choose the best
quality vegatables, meat and spices for us. As a result, such ingredients of the meal determine the health
level of the meal.

To sum up, everybody may have different choises about eating. Yet, right choise can be a turning point for
their life quality. Therefore, everybody have to look for the best choise and according to my opinion, it
is eating in their house .

Now to begin with, when I compare the two essays you have written I notice that they are on the short side. There are one of two ways you can solve this problem 1) you could elaborate on the examples that you give and 2) you may want to consider a third supporting paragraph. If we take a closer look at your first supporting paragraph (and the second supporting paragraph of your first essay) we can see that you are missing an example. As I have said before "Do not forget to give specific examples to support your reasons. It is stipulated in the question and an essay lacking examples may lose points!" In terms of grammar you have made the same types of mistakes that you have made in the first one. Lets take a look at the conclusion for example; "Therefore, everybody have to look..." This type of mistake I have commented on before in previous essays written by "simemis"; this type of mistake will also lose you a great deal of points, so please take care in the future. Point: low 3

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