My third essay;
Is the ability to read and write more important today than in the past? Why or why not? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.
People have begun writing from the invention of writing. We can see the examples of these writings in early human remnants, stone carvings, cave walls or the most prominent examples of writings in sagas. Since from early human period, both writing and reading became more important for human beings.
First, we can easily see the importance of reading and writing system in every part of our life. Reading and writing could not find the place for itself easily on people communications, people used to choose to speak with each other in business. But this has changed in time and writing and reading became the crucial thing for the companies. In my company, when I get to my desk I open my computer to check new mails, because I communicate with our customers via email. Using email system gives me lots of opportunities the most important one is, because we choose the writing system, every word we use are recorded and if we have conflict with some cases in the future with my client I can use my e-mail to prove myself.
The second reason for my propensity for believing the reading and writing system is more important than the past is because the printing system is also improved, we can find any written source easily. When I go for a walk in my city I see many book shops around the street, especially in big shopping centers. In the past people were not lucky as we are today, they had to wait for a long time to get a book that they wanted, and so the writing and reading system may not be important for the people compared to us. When I entered a book shop I generally have difficulty to choose a book because there are lots of books; best sellers, story, education and so forth. Due to the fact that the reading and writing system is important for people in the present days, authors are exhorted to write new books so we can find the books easily.
Furthermore, it is important to become a good reader and writer to express ourselves more clearly. In our society, people tend to use speaking to each other on the phone sometimes they use internet system to talk. When we mention Internet I can definitely say that this system is completely build up on writing system. For example, there are lots of social platforms on the Internet such as forums or chat rooms; these all use written language. Nowadays, I have bought a new plasma television system and the distributor told me that he did not know much about that new system so he just opened the package and set the television and went out without giving any technical information. So I entered a forum that I am already a member of and searched the information about who experienced that system before. Surprisingly one of my friend already bought same TV. system and shared his information with me on the forum. I believe that if I could not express myself correctly I would not get help from the forum. This happened because I used the writing system cleverly so the other people understand my problem and gave me the neat solution.
All in all, the reading and writing system is always important for the people. With the changes of the technological and social improvements of the society, the importance of these systems has increased.
This is a much better essay. You are slowly on the road to getting a 4 (but not yet:). Your introduction is still lacking strength. I want you to go back and rewrite it again and again until you are happy with it and then post it here for me to check. Once you have found the introduction that you are happy with try and repeat that structure when writing introductions to other essay questions. There are still a few too many grammatical mistakes, but nothing too serious. Actually there are a few words in your essay that you dont know how to use such as "exhorted", I know these words look good but unless you are 100% sure of how to use them, don't! Finally, try using those transitional phrases that I mentioned in your first essay. Keep up the hard work:)
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