• TOPİC: Many students choose to attend schools or universities outside their home countries. Why do some students study abroad? Use specific reasons and details to explain your answer


• There is no doubt that education is the most important thing in today's world. Some students go abroad to continue their education there. Going abroad has big advantages for students and , in my opinion , it is the best thing to improve education quality , get real life experience and make real friends .

• To start with, although almost all universities have good quality , some of them are better than others. Some undergraduates choose studying abroad because they want to get into universities that are better than their local universities. According to me , I live in Turkey but I want to attend a college in the USA because the best universities are located there. As a result, studying abroad is important for students because there are better schools that they can attend out of their homeland.


• In addition to this, one of the main qualifications that employers want to see in curricular vitaes is life experience. So, in order to get real life experience, students should be far away from their family. Roughly , when I go to the USA , I might have problems that I should cope with by myself ,and the experiences that I gain throughout this overcoming process , will give me a chance to be better than my opponents.


• Moreover, when people have no relatives near them , they tend to confide people at times more than they used to . For instance, if I couldn't find a friend or a person to talk , I would always try to find someone that I can trust and I can confide. Furthermore, studying abroad is very important for undergraduates because they will be alone and this situation leads them to make real friends .

• All in all , students attend schools or universities outside their home countries because they are interested in their education and going abroad is the best way to have unique educational experience

FEEDBACK
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