Not everything that is learned contained in books. Compare and contrast knowledge gained from experience with knowledge gained from books. Which source is more important ? Why?

When I was studying at Bogazici University , which is a very popular university with its high quality education system and well known professors in Turkey, I had a part time job at a private bank. My strong academic knowledge was of course help me alot in worklife but the knowledge that I gained from my parttime job made more then that. I had experience many advantages of having a part time job. Consequently I believe it is imperative to gain knowledge from experiences. Of the numerous advantages of that perhaps the crucial are learning fast , receiving complete knowledge , having responsibility.

The first advantage of having knowledge through experiences is learning fast inasmuchas people use all of the abilities they have inorder to learn a new thing through experiences. Learn to cook or example, it is a thing that you learn fast when you are really trying to cook something. It seems too difficult when you read a repice in a cook book however it becomes easy when you start to do something by your own. People use their eyes, ears and noise which help to learn fast.

Not only learning fast is a major benefit but also receivi ng complete knowledge is another important point due to in business life managers expect from people not only knowing the necesarry knowledge but also using this knowledge in challenging tasks. Information which learn from books are the small side of true knowledge, people should complete this knowldege it terms of using this in pratically in real tasks. Having a driving license for example, it doesn’t actually show that you can drive a car , it shows only that you have necessary information but is it the same thing with driving a car i don’t think so. You should bring this knowledge in action, which calls experience.

Indeed a recent academic study I have recently read in Capital which is an academic magazine in Turkey, states that people do not lose the knowledge which gain from experience. This idea supports that the people who ride a bike in their childhood, never forget to ride a bike, however a knowledge which gain from a book can easy dissapear in mind.

In addition to learning fast and receiving complete knowledge having reponsibility is another important point or learning things from experience. Most of the bad things seem unreal when you read them from books however when you face the same situation in your real life you should take all the reponsibilities and do your best.

In conclusion ater highligting the advantages of getting knowledge from experiences I think it isobvious that learning by living is very important for people. Actually it is crucial that people utilise these benefits otherwise they may not develop in to successful and well adjusted individuals.

FEEDBACK
It is nice to see you use a structure which is familiar to you Yazgid; however, this essay has a lot more mistakes (when compared to your first one) and that has immediately brought your points down. Some of the mistakes you have made are related to your use of the basic structures that you incorporate into your writing. A good example is at the begining of the second paragraph "Not only learning fast is...", which should actually read " Not only is learning fast..." When you make mistakes with such underlying structures, it becomes obvious that you have tried to memorize long structures and the raters really don't like this. The advantage of using such structures, however, is that they are easier to check for mistakes. You need to ensure that you spend at least 3-5minutes checking for these mistakes. Because of the number of mistakes present in this essay, I don't really think you would get any more than3-3.5points