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The Effects of Deforestation


Deforstation is a situation that results in devastating effects.Not only the ecosystem and nature are being affected
but also people. Some of these effects range from starvation to global warming. Our world prones to these bad effects
in recent years.

One of the dangerous effects of deforestation is starvation. Many of our forests which are the main sources of oxygen have
been destroying for such reasons like building a construction and cultivation. If the forests destroy in a mindles way,animals
living in the forest can became extinct in several decades. Therefore, the ecosystem will bw disturbed and starvation will be
an inevitable result in this way. For instance, if an animal which is a food supply for people extincts, people are more likely to
seek for another animals. However, if the other animals extinct,people have to seek for one another. This circle will certainly
be deadlocked one day. Consequently,people may more likely to suffer from starvation and also animals will, too.

Another effect of deforestation is global warming that is known as climate change. As we know the limit temperature of the
world has been increasing to a high level year by year. Huge glaciers are melting in the North Pole and in The Antarctic.
Therefore , sea level has been raising approximately 0,1 mm in a year. We can learn more about this increaisng from scientific
studies about global warming. Because of the increase in sea levels, coasts of countries are morelikely to be under water.

To sum up, climate change has dangerous effects on the world and on people. It should be regarded as the main environmental
problem. We should take some measures like not to use sprays that reveal harmful gases to the atmosphere. For a good living ,
we must be aware of these hazardous results.

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merhaba yeni üye oldum foruma. Böyle bir writing ile yaklaşık kaç puan alabilirim :( ?

The Effects of Deforestation


Deforstation is a situation that results in devastating effects.Not only the ecosystem and nature are being affected
but also people. Some of these effects range from starvation to global warming. Our world prones to these bad effects
in recent years.

One of the dangerous effects of deforestation is starvation. Many of our forests which are the main sources of oxygen have
been destroying for such reasons like building a construction and cultivation. If the forests destroy in a mindles way,animals
living in the forest can became extinct in several decades. Therefore, the ecosystem will bw disturbed and starvation will be
an inevitable result in this way. For instance, if an animal which is a food supply for people extincts, people are more likely to
seek for another animals. However, if the other animals extinct,people have to seek for one another. This circle will certainly
be deadlocked one day. Consequently,people may more likely to suffer from starvation and also animals will, too.

Another effect of deforestation is global warming that is known as climate change. As we know the limit temperature of the
world has been increasing to a high level year by year. Huge glaciers are melting in the North Pole and in The Antarctic.
Therefore , sea level has been raising approximately 0,1 mm in a year. We can learn more about this increaisng from scientific
studies about global warming. Because of the increase in sea levels, coasts of countries are morelikely to be under water.

To sum up, climate change has dangerous effects on the world and on people. It should be regarded as the main environmental
problem. We should take some measures like not to use sprays that reveal harmful gases to the atmosphere. For a good living ,
we must be aware of these hazardous results.

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merhaba yeni üye oldum foruma. Böyle bir writing ile yaklaşık kaç puan alabilirim :( ?

The Effects of Deforestation


Deforstation is a situation that results in devastating effects.Not only the ecosystem and nature are being affected
but also people. Some of these effects range from starvation to global warming. Our world prones to these bad effects
in recent years.

One of the dangerous effects of deforestation is starvation. Many of our forests which are the main sources of oxygen have
been destroying for such reasons like building a construction and cultivation. If the forests destroy in a mindless way,animals
living in the forest can become extinct in several decades. Therefore, the ecosystem will be disturbed and starvation will be
an inevitable result in this way. For instance, if an animal which is a food supply for people extincts, people are more likely to
seek for another animals. However, if the other animals extinct,people have to seek for one another. This circle will certainly
be deadlocked one day. Consequently,people may more likely to suffer from starvation and also animals will, too.

Another effect of deforestation is global warming that is known as climate change. As we know the limit temperature of the
world has been increasing to a high level year by year. Huge glaciers are melting in the North Pole and in The Antarctic.
Therefore , sea level has been raising approximately 0,1 mm in a year. We can learn more about this increaisng from scientific
studies about global warming. Because of the increase in sea levels, coasts of countries are morelikely to be under water.

To sum up, climate change has dangerous effects on the world and on people. It should be regarded as the main environmental
problem. We should take some measures like not to use sprays that reveal harmful gases to the atmosphere. For a good living ,
we must be aware of these hazardous results.