Do you agree or disagree with following statement?Smoking should not be permitted in restaurants , and state laws that prohibit it should be upheld. Used specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

Tobocco has been being used since it was found out by explorers.At first, it was so enjoyable to smoke that no one paid attention to its harms. However, besides being harmful, it has effects on nonsmokers more adversely than smokers. Personally, I think that it should not be permitted to smoke in public places for several reasons which are no one has rights to poison others, it might annoy some people and it could be bad sample for children.

To start with, as I said before cigarette does not poison those who smoke as much as non-smokers. For example, I have been attending all my father's business meetings for 12 years and under no circumstances would I like to smoke. However, once I went to hospital to have check-up done, my doctor said to me that I had more smoke in my lungs than my father. Aftermath, he started to explain us the reasons of this bothering situation but it is obvious fact that I have already known it that being in meetings which include so many smokers, made it to me.Therefore, no one has rights to poison others


The second reason as to why I believe that smoking might annoy others is because it smells horrible and people know its harms. For instance, I realised that my friends started being more annoyed after they had heard my doctor experience. The times I met up with them, it was so easy to notice that they treat aggressively to people those who smoke since they already knew that smoking would poison them.

Moreover, children represent people's behaviors eagerly.Nonetheless, under no circumstances are today's families want to see their children while they are poisoning themselves. For instance, my brother is kind of individual who likes showing off and acting like adults. Hanging out places where smoking is allowed , he started to smoke. As a result, my parents realised the situation and forbade him to go these places again.


Consequently, the examples which I gave above are progressing in public places and there is no doubt that restaurants are the most running places today. Therefore, in order to avoid this kind of occurents government should ban smoking in restaurants.

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