After graduating from highschool, it was very important for me to continue my education at Bogazici university, which is the best and most well known university in Turkey. I studied very hard to get acceptanceed from at Bogazici university and finally, i succeded. I have experienced many advantages of attending university . Consequently, i believe it is imperative that a person having gets a university education. Of the numerous significant advantages of that, perhaps the most crucial are getting a highly qualified education , finding a job easily and earning more money.

The first important benefit of attending university, is getting highly qualified education inasmuchas in todays world it is essential that people have a good academic background in order to represent themselves in the best way they can in society. Having a strong academical background increase a person’s self-confidence. Infact, i I read about an artical in Capital, which is one of the most serious business magazines in Turkey, which states that self confidence degree’s of the people (didn't understand what you were trying to say here), who graduated from university, are twice two times higher than those who didn’t attend the university.

Not only is getting high qualifies education ,but also , finding job easily is another crucial advantage due to the fact today a university degree is more than just a need is actually a must. Having university degree is a major issue to find a job easily. For instance , my brother who is studying law at Odtü which is another best university in Turkey, and will graduate at june this year , has already got a few job offer from multinational companies. If you have a strong academic background, you dont need to find a job , actually job finds you.

Finally, attending university is also important for earning more money. Companies want to work with well educated young people who have knowledge and talent, so they are paying more to the university graduated people due to the fact they give them more importantance and more respect. For example lots of companies in Turkey paying extra premium to the employeers who can speak foreign languages or have knowledge about spesific issues. University education offers people a brillant future .

In conclusion , after highlighting the advantages of attending university , including getting high qualified education, finding job easily and earning more money it is obvious that graduation of a university is the best choice. Indeed, provided that people can take full advantage of the benefits of attending university, they can maximise their potential as successful individuals.

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A well presented and structured essay; well done. The only problem, as you can see, is all the small grammar mistakes (as illustrated in the first supporting paragraph). However, that being said, the mistakes that you have made are minor, in the sense that they do not detract from what you are trying to say. I could see this essay getting at least 4 points in the real exam.