Topic: why do people prefer to go university
As far as I remember this doesn't appear to be an original topic from ETS. When choosing your Topics please refer to the sample question list on the official ETS web site. And a quick pointer; the vast majority of questions to date have been in the "Do you agree or disagree format"; so when practicing try to choose questions which use this format.

We are familiar with the sight of people who go to a university. The number of people who choose to attend a university has been increasing significantly in recent years. University plays an important role in individuals' lives. There are many reasons why people go to a university such as meeting new people, increasing knowledge and finding a good job.

One of the reasons why people go to a university is to meet new people. In At university, there are a lots of people who come from diffrenr places. Therefore, individuals can make new friends at university. They can also learn different cultures and lifestyles from foreign students which give rise to widen their vision and broaden their mind.


Another reason why people go to a university is to increase knowledge. High schools provide fundamental knowledge for students. However, people can focus on their interested majors in universities. Therefore, they can get more information about subjects which they like. Moreover, people, who attend a university, may meet people with different backgrounds. As a result, they can broaden knowledge of their majors. Knowledge accumulation is inevitable during university period. This should be part of your first supporting paragraph, as it reflects the same idea

Another reason is to find a good job. Universities make it possible for students to have a diploma. The diploma plays a pivotal role in finding a good job. Most of the employers want to recruit people who have a university diploma. Therefore, people who went to a university are more likely to have a better career.

In conclusion, it is obvious that meeting new friends, knowledge accumulation and find a good job are essential reasons for going a university. Not only making new friends but also increasing knowledge play an important role in broaden people's vision. Going to a university can also give rise to having a good career. Briefly, going to an university should be an indispensable part of individuals' lives.

FEEDBACK As with other previous essays that students have written, your essay is lacking any kind of example in any shape or form. And again, as I have stated before in previous feedback, examples are an important part of any TOEFL question. Because the question you chose does not appear to be an original topic it is very difficult for me to give it an accurate score. However, in terms of grammar use and organization, I would say it is worth at least 3-4 points. The fact that you did not exemplify your ideas would actually bring your score down. I would also recommend that you use more consistent transitional phrase to introduce each supporting paragraph as the ones that you have chosen over simplify the point that you are trying to make


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